I’ve been away for…a long time, but in the meantime I’ve made something to make up for it!
A little backstory: The French “stole” a character whose story I was about to write. They created one with similar gimmicks and abilities and pretty much the same name!. So I decided to mix their story and mine into something greater than the sum of its parts.
Holy Cow!! This is really good. At least as far as the writing goes on the first few pages.
Great sentence spacing that fits with the story flow.
Good wording. Very good wording. 🙂
Took me a while to check what TV series this story is bases upon.
I really like French animations. They are never as stupid or down right mind deteriorating as some other nation ones sometimes are.
If I where to point out anything that I see as improvement worthy then it be the excessive usage of “he” and “she” for almost every character adressation.
This is long…… Sadly I will have to put this into my to-read-list for later. Keep up the awesome work.
Been way to long since I copied the arts from the Discord over here.
Hope I do not miss anything since It is rather hard to find the last entry from here.
Also in case a good piece of art was not copied over please repost it here yourself.