- Wed, May 9th '18 at 20h 08m 29s #7704
Alright, now that I’m back I guess it’s time for me to do my thing. I’d like to offer you a fantasy story I’ve been working on and off on for a long time. This is Blackheart. There’s some inspirations from things like Demon’s Souls and Dungeons and Dragons.
Some time ago in the Kingdom of Geralthin, humans lived alongside beasts and monsters. Sometimes in harmony, sometimes in bitter struggle. The most recent King, Salign, began a campaign of eliminating non-humans from the kingdom. This culminated in a forced mass-exodus to the outskirts of the kingdom. There the monsters were led to a small town for their kind, which grew into a sprawling metropolis.
One day, a sinister black fog rolled over the city. All communication ceased, and anyone who entered never returned. Inside, demons roam the streets, killing or corrupting all they come across. The denizens of the city lie in hiding, awaiting the end of the nightmare.
The fog slowly reaches farther and farther outside the city. Soon, the entire world will be engulfed in darkness, to be a personal playground for the armies of hell.
It is up to the knight Alexander to enter the fog, reach the city, and find out how to purge the corruption from the land once and for all.
Please, check it out and let me know what you think! It’s still a work in progress, so I’m expecting to post updates whenever a new chapter is up. There’s five chapters finished at the moment. I’m hoping to make this story into a book if possible, so please send some feedback!Mon, May 21st '18 at 23h 35m 11s #7776
Next chapter is complete! I had a whole lot of fun with this one. Conflict at last!Tue, May 22nd '18 at 20h 45m 21s #7796LanceModerator
So I started to read and it is great.
Sadly I only glimpsed over the first chapter so far. Will read it all later.
Could use a bit of refinement if you ever intend to have it printed.
Keep up the great work(s). 🙂Thu, May 24th '18 at 3h 42m 36s #7801
Hey, thanks a lot for reading. It’s been a challenge for me to sit down and re-edit everything I’ve written time and time again, and not many people are taking me up on looking through it. I really do hope this goes somewhere.
So what kind of refinement? I’m always looking to improve. Anything in particular?Thu, Jun 21st '18 at 23h 03m 41s #7922
Next part is up! Very dialogue-heavy, hope I did a good job.Fri, Feb 22nd '19 at 21h 39m 40s #8890
Alright, people. This is it. The whole thing’s done. I’ve completed every single chapter throughout the whole story. With the completion of my book, I’ve gotta say, it felt amazing to finally reach the end. With the end however comes a redraft. I’m now working on refining the story, and looking for readers. If anyone wants to give this a read and give me some critiques, I’d really love your opinion on it.Sun, Feb 24th '19 at 18h 20m 05s #8891LanceModerator
I always have enjoyed reading your works and always will.
Thanks a bunch for posting them here.
Will give feedback when I come around to reading some of it again.
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